Thread:Booster Beetle/@comment-4651179-20151122075827

Please, remember [[Thread:846835|the message I sent you a month ago. This is particularly in reference to some recent edits in the Deadpool page.

While I understand your intentions are good, to add more info in a character's page, you need to understand that doing so without having read the source of the info you're adding damages the quality of the article. For example:

Daredevil teamed up with Daredevil to battle Typhoid May.

This paragraph composed of a single sentence barely contains any information. There's no context explained, no consequences mentioned, not even a conclusion given. Why did they fight Typhoid Mary? Why did they team up? How did the story end?

Additionally, the text of the articles needs to have a flow. Said flow is basically non-existant if the article is composed of one-sentence paragraphs, or heavily damaged with the inclusion of these.

The paragraphs you write need to have connectors, that prevent the sentences that form them from being simply a succession of statements. For example:

He teamed up with Siryn again for a mission. Together they escape from being kidnapped by Dr. Weisman Shatterstar is forced to battle a even more crazy Deadpool.

Could be turned into something like this:

Deadpool was joined by Siryn once again, in order to complete a mission that involved XXXXXXXXXX. Because of XXXXXXXXX, they found themselves facing Dr. Weisman, and escaped capture because/by XXXXXXXX. As a result of XXXXXXXXXX, Shatterstar was forced to battle a even more crazy Deadpool. In the end XXXXXXXXX.

Finally, please remember that the history text in articles should contain events relevant for the character, not every single one of their adventures. If you want, non-important information can be used as sort of a connector that allows sentences to be started more naturally, for example: "After thwarting A.I.M.'s attempt to distribute the Extremis virus all around the world, Iron Man was faced by..."

And if you can, please try to revisit some of your work like this page, for example.

Thank you very much. 