Thread:Alfirejones/@comment-3406131-20161114073722

Hi!

I went through your pages of having the history presented from century to century.

I would counsel you a few things:
 * Try to be consistent regarding punctuation, syntax, etc. Example:
 * "Sir Francis Drake lead expedition to the Caribbean the ships surgeon was injured by the natives becoming the immortal creature known as Bloodscream."
 * Read yourself and try to see if you would had understood it if you were not the writer. Examples:
 * "In 1640, A.D., he was assassinated with a dagger by the time-displaced Helmut Zemo, his distant descendant. Hackett Zemo tried to have time traveling Helmut Zemo killed out of revenge for killing his father". From what I read, we're still talking about Francis Drake.
 * "Fiona married in 1707 and had three daughter. Her husband died five years later, and she soon remarried to another man and had three other daughters..." At that point, she wasn't mentioned (so she needs a link)

Most of those pages have similar issues, please correct them, thanks. 